She crouched over, allowing her lungs to take in as much air as possible. She was tired but couldn’t stop now. The cut she had sustained on her leg whilst running away added to the lethargy.
Smells from the shore gave her hope. She could hear the soft night time waves lapping against the rocks. The moon shone between the entangled trees, getting lighter as she neared the beach.
She cursed herself and her quench for an exciting life. Promises of love and laughter soon were lost beyond the sea.
“Adele.” Jessie panted “Hurry up, they’re not far behind us! ”
She picked up pace to join Jessie in the water, wincing as the salt stung her wound. Jessie took charge of the oars when they settled in the boat.
An adventurous, immersive and fun holiday Jessie had described this as. She was still waiting for the latter part.
Looking back towards the shore as the other teams began to emerge, she felt a sense of satisfaction.
Okay winning was quite fun!
(172 words)
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As part of my year of vulnerability I am putting myself out there with my writing. Here I am participating in a Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers challenge. The challenge is to write a piece between 100 and 150 words (+- 25 words) inspired by the photo featured above.
Word Count: 172
Picture Credit: The Storyteller's abode by Louise
Emma x
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That’s a cool story…we all love to win..
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Thank you. Really appreciate your feedback. π
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I had images of Jessie and Adele chased by shady elements. The end was pleasant. tight write-up.
http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.com/2017/07/the-dual-life.html
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Thanks for reading and your feedback. I started writing out with a more sinister ending then opted for the twist.
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Good bait and switch – like it!
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Thank you for reading and commenting π
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Nice! You grabbed my attention!
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Fab!! I’m pleased I was able to. Thanks for reading. π
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That was quite an unexpected end, though i enjoyed the surprise a lot . Running to escape is all adventures and no fun, but pacing up and ultimately winning a game must be beyond gratifying. Admire their tenacity.
Very well written.
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I have just seen this comment now. Not sure how I missed it. Thank you so much for reading. I’m glad you enjoyed it π
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Nice story Emma, sounds like quite a ‘holiday.’ The sort of thing I would like to do so long as I knew it would be safe in the end!
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Thanks Iain. It does sound like some crazy holiday. The type I put on my bucket list and never do π
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Great story of competition! Great descriptive writing!
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Thank you for your lovely comments πand thanks for giving me the chance once again to take part. I really am enjoying these!
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I’m so happy you are enjoying the prompts! That’s what this is all about!
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Nice story!
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Thank you Rosemary.
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Beautifully written and happy they are in the winning postition
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Thank you for reading and for your comments, really appreciate it π
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I really didn’t see that end coming! Delightful.
Click to read my FFfAW
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Thanks for reading π glad the twist worked. I’ll be sure to check yours out.
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Fun twist. I was definitely worried for Adele and Jessie until you revealed the competition at the end. Great story!
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Thank you Sasha. It was a last minute change of plan to add the twist!
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